Clip #4 has the best sound quality. Do whatever you did during that one.

Much better emotional presentation then before; you defiantly have the skill. It's just for me, I don't think you were gruff, or cold enough. I got vibes and subtly noticed that you sounded almost pleased, where as you're supposed to be a complete jerk.

You've got the talent though. Looking forward to hear what else you try

I agree with Utsuho, Clip 4 had the best recording settings.

Try reading the lines at a little lower pitch if you could, this may help you to sound more disinterested and generally mean.

Also, I imagined the lines coming out slightly differently. Emphasis on different parts of the sentence, pauses in different spots, etc...

For instance: Clip 3, the emphasis was on YOU and CAN'T. I would have put accents at KILL and DIE, with a pause between the two parts of the sentence:

YOU can't kill what CAN'T die becomes
you can't KILL <pause> what can't DIE

Or in clip 2, you put emphasis on I, and then the rest of the sentence trailed off from there. I would have put accents at PROBLEM and FIRE, with a pause in between.

I have yet to find a problem that can't be solved with fire becomes
I have yet to find a PROBLEM <pause> that can't be solved with FIRE

Subtle, but important. But that's all a matter of your personal preference. You're the voice actress after all.

Overall, AMAZING. Keep up the good work!

I know it's a bit of a stretch, but I believe the quality of this character in particular would greatly increase if you could sound like a woman in her late 30s to early 40s.

Needs to sound a little more jaded, I guess. Mokou has a pretty rough past, and I can't imagine her sounding otherwise.

So I think for clip 4 I was using my WoW headset and was recording in pseudo-stereo... I will be able to get my hands on a USB microphone sometime next week, which should fix the audio quality issues as I'm constantly fighting the war with mic static :P

I took the suggestions into account for intonations; but I don't think I can go much lower pitch wise than heard in this batch but it's worth a shot if it's still not low enough.

Better...but it still isn't cold/distant/gruff enough. This is probably due to what we're looking for being out of your vocal range. I suggest trying to work on that

Much improved! I enjoyed it much better.

I don't agree with Utsuho, this sounded Gruff, cold, and distant enough for me.

The recording was not always the same though, maybe you were farther away from the microphone during different clips, I don't know for sure. But I liked this a lot.

Honestly, I think Mokou is just out of my vocal range (my normal speaking voice is a little higher than my Eirin lines) Ah well. Was definitely worth a shot to get some experience to this whole voice recording thing, as I'm still fairly new to it.