I don't think this is the general voice I expect from Patchouli.

The coughs were rather overdone. As far as Patchy is concerned in general, I don't really see her inflection going much higher than the 2nd clip. As a matter of fact, that is probably the best out of the rest of the lot.

Fake coughing is a lot harder than it seems (double so if you're sick instead with "wet" coughing)

Ah well, someone's gotta liven these boards up as it doesn't look like you're getting too too many auditions trickling in anymore. Wish I could help in some other way, I'm actually waiting for one of the Steam sales so I can grab the PC copy on the cheap but I dunno when that'll be next XD