One thing I noticed is that some of the clips seem to get cut off. For example, you don't get to finish saying "graze" so it sounds like "gray." If you need to, you can record for an extra second after you're done talking to ensure that everything you're saying is recorded. (Any extra silence left at the end can be trimmed out later.)

In regards to the audition, it's not bad. Next time you try something though, it would be best if you first ask about how to present each line before you do. Feel free to ask anything before you start making wild guesses.

In regards to that, some of your emotions in the context of the lines were off. If you plan on doing a retry just ask and I'll explain a few things.

For future recordings, might I suggest either trying Eirin/Sakuya (since they're virtually the same) or Mokou? I think you'd be able to do a good job with them

Alright - can you give the intonations for Eirin/Sakuya/Mokou/Reimu lines? This is my first time doing any sort of voice thing so I'm open to any suggestions! I'll redo Reimu the right way as well, and just leave the silence for you guys to handle :)

Heck, it'd probably be easiest to just put the intonations for each line along with the audition info on the main VAA post (I didn't see it, nor anything about where to go for clarifications)

OP has been updated. Hopefully it'll help out

Yup it does!

I will record everything in the morning, hopefully I'll fare a bit better, I've love to be a part of this!

You went to the opposite extreme that Mysty did, you were a little too quiet in some recordings, especially number 5.

Pitch was very good.

Make sure to leave some silence at the end again.

Well done. Those are my critiques.